Model Senate
Model Senate is a senior Humanities project in which we are assigned a chosen senator to represent. Through representing senators, we researched voting records, stances on points, and personalities to mimic. There were also many people playing roles in the executive committee that played a big factor in the organization of the mock senate exhibition. In this project Senators were to write bills for their own committees (EPW or Finance) that the executive committee voted on. Two bills were passed onto exhibition night. Exhibition night was run how senate runs. We had the senate floor, subcommittees and voting blocks. Speeches were made and amendments were proposed. I personally played the role of Mark Warner from Virginia. I wrote a bill, wrote a speech to propose an amendment, and voted on the bills in this project.
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WRiting Reflection 1
Goal 1 - Citing Text. In my future writing I want to cite text or dialogue more effectively. This will further backup my ideas and help me synthesize a point. In my Tocqueville writing, I feel as if I did not do this as effectively as I could have. Though I think that my ideas were stated well, quotes from the text would have really made my point strong, and I will cite more effectively on future writings. To do this I will reference back to the text more, and incorporate others arguments into my main argument as evidence.
Goal 2 - Personalize My Writing. In my future writing, I want to personalize the text. In my college essay, I feel as if I did a poor job at this. I feel as I did not connect my ideas back to me, and that left my college essay sort of disconnected. To fix this I will use more personalized language such as I or My. I will also use more personalized language, and tell stories or personal experiences. This will further help me personalize my essays and make it feel more emotional to the reader.
Goal 3 - Use Imagery. In my future writing, I would like to use more imagery and storytelling. This adds more of a personalized, engaging aspect to my writing. I am a super analytical person, so this is a little difficult for me. This shows in the last paragraphs of my college essay.To fix this I want to use more imagery in my future essays. To do this I will use more descriptive vocab to make the reader feel really absorbed in my writing.
Revision of College Essay. During the process of revising my college essay, I grew a lot as a writer. I grew with the storytelling aspect, as well as the personalizing my writing aspect. With my first draft, I had very little showing, and mostly telling which made the essay pretty uninteresting. I also had many “we” and “us” in the essay which disconnected the topic to me. I received some great feedback from my college counselor, peers, and parents to help me revise the essay into a strong, personal one. I noticed there was a common theme on the revisions that needed to be made and included more imagery and personal words. A section of my essay went like this, “What would my friends and family do if I were to meet my demise today? This thought runs through my head as I drive towards the jagged peaks in the distance, snow slowly drifting down to the frozen ground. A tinge of guilt enters my mind, and I think about friends my age I had known in my community who were doing exactly what I am doing. They weren't so lucky, and I can’t help thinking, I might be next.” This was a result of over twenty revisions in my college essay.
Goal 2 - Personalize My Writing. In my future writing, I want to personalize the text. In my college essay, I feel as if I did a poor job at this. I feel as I did not connect my ideas back to me, and that left my college essay sort of disconnected. To fix this I will use more personalized language such as I or My. I will also use more personalized language, and tell stories or personal experiences. This will further help me personalize my essays and make it feel more emotional to the reader.
Goal 3 - Use Imagery. In my future writing, I would like to use more imagery and storytelling. This adds more of a personalized, engaging aspect to my writing. I am a super analytical person, so this is a little difficult for me. This shows in the last paragraphs of my college essay.To fix this I want to use more imagery in my future essays. To do this I will use more descriptive vocab to make the reader feel really absorbed in my writing.
Revision of College Essay. During the process of revising my college essay, I grew a lot as a writer. I grew with the storytelling aspect, as well as the personalizing my writing aspect. With my first draft, I had very little showing, and mostly telling which made the essay pretty uninteresting. I also had many “we” and “us” in the essay which disconnected the topic to me. I received some great feedback from my college counselor, peers, and parents to help me revise the essay into a strong, personal one. I noticed there was a common theme on the revisions that needed to be made and included more imagery and personal words. A section of my essay went like this, “What would my friends and family do if I were to meet my demise today? This thought runs through my head as I drive towards the jagged peaks in the distance, snow slowly drifting down to the frozen ground. A tinge of guilt enters my mind, and I think about friends my age I had known in my community who were doing exactly what I am doing. They weren't so lucky, and I can’t help thinking, I might be next.” This was a result of over twenty revisions in my college essay.
4th Amendment mini project
This mini project was about the 4th Amendment and how it affects ourselves. We delved deep into your rights when you are a student at school, or when you get pulled over, and other scenarios like that. Many articles were read and we definitely learned a ton from this rather short project. After learning about all of these different subcategories that are affected by the 4th Amendment, we synthesized a project to do. This project was to further educate people about a topic of their choice.
For my project, I decided to study about warrantless searches of vehicles. I really connected to this topic because I have never been pulled over before, and am a somewhat beginner driver that has only been driving for two years. This topic was also interesting to me because I really thought that the concept of losing rights one you step into a vehicle was interesting. This was also interesting because a lot of the population drives cars, whereas the majority of the people don't usually own firearms or something similar to that. This is why I thought that my topic was so interesting, and why I wanted to learn more about vehicle law.
For my project, I decided to study about warrantless searches of vehicles. I really connected to this topic because I have never been pulled over before, and am a somewhat beginner driver that has only been driving for two years. This topic was also interesting to me because I really thought that the concept of losing rights one you step into a vehicle was interesting. This was also interesting because a lot of the population drives cars, whereas the majority of the people don't usually own firearms or something similar to that. This is why I thought that my topic was so interesting, and why I wanted to learn more about vehicle law.